Wednesday, November 3, 2010
Trial of the Heart - Logline
Emily Hennas has the power to ease a man's suffering - the man responsible for murdering her family. Left alone to raise her youngest son, she faces the most difficult decision of her life: keep fighting for the justice her family deserves, or forgive the man, Conway Duke, for causing their deaths.
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Who was murdered? At first I assumed her husband and children, that she was the only one left living in her family but then you mention a son. Why did Conway murder her family? I don't think his name needs to be in the logline.
ReplyDeleteI think this could be combined into one sentence - Left alone to raise her youngest son, Emily Hennas faces a most difficult decision: keep fighting for the justice the memory of her family deserves or forgive their murderer.
Or something along those lines. Love the title! Good luck.
Talk about a heart wrenching novel! Nicole's advice is awesome. I would start off with more of why we should care for Emily - tell us her family was murdered and maybe how (if its relevant). Then show us the choice she has to make.
ReplyDeleteGood luck and thanks for joining!
I like this, but it leaves me wondering about the circumstances of the murder. Was is accidental, such as a car wreck, or did he intentionally murder them? If intentional, was it an assassination or the work of a psychopath? I think giving us a little info here would add to the intrigue.
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